Month: March 2014

It’s dark, it’s gloomy… Pitch black. What do I do?! My phone is out of battery. No electricity. No light. No signal. I try to find my way around. I trip, grazing my knee against the wet concrete. I feel no pain. I feel scared. In the corner of my eye, I manage to capture a tiny little light, I follow it. Can’t keep my hopes too high though. I don’t even know if I’m hallucinating, I feel ill. As I approach the light, I realise that it’s actually a lamppost. I’m outdoors, that helps, at least I’m not in an enclosed space. I shout for help, but all I can hear is my echo. No sign of any living thing. I feel my pulse rebounding around my head, and the thunder bolts running through my chest. I have no hope, neither happiness. I drop to the floor, I cry, I sigh. I must make it…

I get to my feet, wipe my tears and I’m off! Still no signal, daylight soon. Can’t wait, I can’t be too far from home.

Relative Clauses

The street was totally deserted
The ground was strewn with litter

The street, that was strewn with litter, was totally deserted.

One of my own.

Joe is a naughty student.
Joe was flicking his pen at people.

Joe, who is a naughty student, was flicking his pen at people

Relative clauses make writing a lot more interesting, they give you as much information in one sentence as they do in two block sentences, they make the writing flow which makes the reader feel more engaged. Personally, I am going to use a lot more relative clauses then I used to. As a reader I feel that the more language devices, the better. When I do read, (which isn’t very often :P) i feel inspired by the author, I want to use devices that they use in order to make my readers feel what i feel when I read.

When i read, I have to stop at a certain point, when I write, it’s the opposite…